The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The diagram displays the manufacturing process of
sugar
produced from sugarcane. For
sugar
production, the process includes seven main stages
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harvesting, crushing, purifying, evaporating, separating, and
finally
drying and cooling takes place. The final product produced is
sugar
.
Initially
, the
sugar
canes are grown up to 12-18 months.
Then
, the harvesting is done. For the harvesting process, two methods can be used, it can be done manually or by a harvester.
Then
, the harvested canes are crushed through a crushing machine to extract the
juice
from the canes.
Following
this
, the
juice
is filtered using a limestone filter. The
juice
is
then
condensed by using an evaporator where the
juice
turns into a syrup.
Finally
, the syrup is moved across a centrifuge where the
sugar
crystals are separated from the syrup
due to
the high pressure produced by the centrifuge.
Lastly
, the
sugar
crystals are dried and cooled for the final product to be formed.
Therefore
, the dried
sugar
crystals are formed.
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