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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion? Give reasons for your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some people believe that the
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 of
food
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 and how to make meals should be introduced in schools
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 others argue that schools should offer only important subjects. I believe that the
science
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 of
food
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 and how to prepare it should be part of the school subjects as it can bring several benefits in student’s lives.
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,
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 essay discusses how creating an understanding of good nutrition, health and well-being
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 important for students to support positive learning and development. Modern society with the advertisement of fast
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 and new products rich in sugar is addressing children and teenagers to choose junk
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 over healthy.
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, it is important for schools to introduce the
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 of
food
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 into their curriculum.
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 subject can positively influence the students’ choices about nutrition creating knowledge about
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 categories, compositions and nutritional values.
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, promoting a healthy and balanced diet can support the students to establish the mindset of acknowledging what they are introducing in their bodies and
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 finding specific foods that might positively impact their well-being. Contrarily, there’s the belief that
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 a subject will reduce the time available for more didactical learning like math, geography or literacy. It might be true as not everyone could be interested in learning about
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.
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, if observing in detail the
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 of
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, it is evident that it involves a series of challenging topics
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 as chemistry, biology,
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 engineering and microbiology.
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,
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 some people think that introducing the
science
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 of
food
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 could be detrimental to students’ learning as it would reduce the time available for more didactical subjects,
on the other hand
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, learning about
food
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 and its composition, can be beneficial as it provides with the knowledge that can support healthy eating and wellbeing.

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