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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar chart displays the data from a survey about Australian
people
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 who consume and purchase
coffee
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 and tea
according to
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 their habits in five different cities.
Overall
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, in four cities except for Adelaide, more than half of citizens went to cafes for
coffee
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 or tea in the
last
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 4 weeks. In Brisbane, the percentage of
people
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 who preferred to buy fresh
coffee
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 is just under 35% and followed by Adelaide. Meanwhile, in Sydney over 40% of
people
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 are willing to buy fresh caffeine, that place has the highest rate compared to other regions. In Australia, approximately more than 45% of the population consumes instant
coffee
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,
in addition
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, the highest and lowest proportion belong to Hobart and Sydney respectively.
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, most
people
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 spend time in a cafe to drink tea or
coffee
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 in order to
this
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coffee
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 consumption rate in three towns namely Melbourne, Hobart and Sydney reach just above 60%
furthermore
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, the highest rate belongs to
people
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 who live in Melbourne.

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