the diagram below shows the production of olive oil
The diagram provided above illustrates the process that includes several steps to manufacture olive oil from olive
fruits
.
There are a total of seven stages, beginning with the hand harvesting of the fruits
from trees and successfully ending with storing and selling the final product which is quality olive oil.
The process begins with olive fruits
being manually harvested and they will be sent to the rinsing machine to wash with cold water. After rinsing, olives are sent to the smashing machine through a conveyor belt and then
separated the seeds from the fruits
. As preparation for the following stages, olive paste without olive stones is ready to pack in the bag with holes.
Subsequently
, the bags will be sent through a pressing machine to separate the excess water. Finally
, everything is ready for packaging. Once olive oil packaging is done, it will be delivered to the shops for storage and sale.Submitted by tu.diepminh on
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