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Countries are getting more and more similar as you can buy similar products everywhere in the word Is this a positive r a negative developement Give your opinion

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Nations are getting more similar to each other, because of the availability of the same
products
 worldwide. In my opinion, it is definitely a positive development in a number of ways. Accessibility to standard
products
 globally actually helps in terms of reduced travel charges.The reason behind , one might not need to cover large distances to purchase their
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products
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 if they are going to get them in their own country. It will eventually save them a lot of money.
Secondly
, introducing one's culture
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 other countries would help to get them familiarized with each other, so it will bring peace and harmony among them.
For instance
, we are importing a lot of things from China
due to
 which people are getting more aware of the Chinese culture and traditions.
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 China government
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 combine projects like CPEC (
China Pakistan
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 economic corridor), to enhance both economic and financial development.
Moreover
, these
products
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 reasonable cost so people will not have to spend huge
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 of cash to buy them. It will
also
 save time for people with tough
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beacuse
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because
 they will be able to shop
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 desired goods at their next door. In order
to conclude
, there are definitely a lot of positive points which support the trend. So I believe that trend should be encouraged in future.
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