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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believes that it is better to get a job straight after school. discuss both views and give yur opinion

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 it is considered by some
people
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 that the best way to secure a good job is being a university graduate, there are others who think that starting
work
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 after school is a better option. From my perspective, deciding to
work
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 is beneficial in the field of business,
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 completing university coursework is the most useful in an academic career. On the one hand, it is attractive to find
work
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 after school,
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 some
people
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 because they will have the opportunity to gain hands-on experience related to their chosen profession and acquire top soft skills
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 as time management, leadership and flexibility.
This
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 results in promotions and a successful career.
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, not only has the job market been increasingly becoming competitive, but there is
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 an overwhelming number of applicants for one position in a company.
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, it is commonly believed by some
people
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 that learning key soft skills can be valuable to a company and having relevant experience in that line of
work
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 , which can put one ahead of the game when they apply for the position.
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 , some
people
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 think that it is more advantageous to pursue higher education after school. Since obtaining
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 academy certificate is an indicator of perseverance, passion and commitment needed to study a degree course for three or four years, a university degree is convincing proof of the competence of the applicants.
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 , most employers will be more impressed by candidates who have qualifications from
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 academy than those with fewer qualifications, which in turn leads educational institution graduates not only to better job opportunities but
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 to higher incomes. In conclusion, even though
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 may vary in their opinions, I think that being a successful career requires a relevant background either in tertiary education or effort experience depending on the type of
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 and field.
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