Some people believe that studing at university or college is the best route to a successful career,while other believe that it is better to get a job straight after graduating from high school.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some individuals think that
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higher education at university or college is the best route to a successful
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career
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the workforce right after high school.
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essay will agree that studying before
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to
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degree's holders is the best way to be
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while
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at the same age.For
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when you study
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you
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profession
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.
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,
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university where
can help you to
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make
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, to help you more confident when you go to
work
. On the other side before
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to college some people want to
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first. About
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believe that you
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your own and you can
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about
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outside school. That
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your mind grow up than
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another friend
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at the same age.
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also
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you
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independence
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about money and you can know more about
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the values
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values
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of money.
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out early than another but that will make you
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have to enrich
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experiences. Taking everything into
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account
,
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choose to continue to study because at the age of 18 we
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ready to
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reality about society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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