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In most countries, multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In most
countries
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, multinational
countries
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 and their
products
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 are becoming more and more important.
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 trend is seriously damaging our
quality
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 of
life
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. To what extent do you agree or disagree
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people
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 say that using our own country's product is very fruitful. In many
countries
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, foreign
countries
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 and their
products
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 are becoming more and more significant.
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 thing is effectively damaging our
quality
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 of
life
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. I vehemently agree with
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 statement.
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 elaborate my views on favouring positive impact. To get the ball rolling, multinational
products
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 have been liked by all
people
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. Owing to
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, they are inclined towards multinational
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 and they are using multinational
products
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 in very high amounts. In doing so, multinational
products
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 are becoming extremely vital in an individual’s
life
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. It would be very precarious for our
life
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 because all
people
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 depend on multinational foods and multinational companies try to make
products
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 in very high amounts.
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, sometimes they make abysmal
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 and it would be very hazardous for all
people
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 because all
people
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 think that buying multinational
products
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 is very beneficial for them but sometimes they get lower
quality
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products
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 and these types of
products
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 are very dangerous for their health. Moving
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along with
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this
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 observation, in
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 modern era all
people
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 think that we should buy foreign
products
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 and they are buying multinational
products
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 and
that is
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 the major reason that they get very dangerous
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 on their hands. In the ,past all
people
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 were purchasing their own
countries
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'
products
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 and they stayed very healthy in their
life
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 because our own company know which types of
products
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 are suitable for
people
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 and they make very suitable
products
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 for their
countries
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'
people
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. All
people
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 believe in
quality
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 and they think that multinational
products
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 are very rich in
quality
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 but multinational companies have been using different kinds of chemicals for making
products
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. Stating the compendium,
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 sometimes
people
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 like to purchase their own
countries
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'
products
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, they fail because they are allured to multinational
products
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. The above monograph has propounded my views for favouring positive impact with my crucial justification.
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