Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after graduating from high school. Dicuss both views and give your opinion.

There is an argument that some communities think that the best action to get a successful career is by studying at
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educational
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or
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, others believe that getting a career straight after finishing high school is better. In my opinion, I completely agree that
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academy or
college
is the best route for
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who want to be successful. First and foremost,
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should recognize that universities and colleges are much safer. A very important point to consider is that after graduating there,
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will have
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accomplishment to help them a good activity with well-earned. Because, when they apply for
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assignment they want
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the accomplishment about that specialized, they will have more chance than others do not have,
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like a consideration about their professional knowledge at that assignment and recruiters
also
will feel peace of mind when employing them. To illustrate
this
point, I would like to mention that most of the recruits at Interviews always have qualifications from the academy . Another point I would like to make is that educational
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and
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will give
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much experience and knowledge about their profession, so they can adjust to the profession quickly.
On the other hand
, if
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get
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operation straight after graduating from high school, they will have more time to get experience and knowledge from
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society
or from the long time they work in
society
.
Such
as Bill Gates and Mark Zuckerberg who are the billionaires of the world without competence from educational
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. But it
also
has pros and cons. Very many public choose
this
way but can’t be successful. Because
society
who want to succeed in
this
way must be very intelligent and have sharp minds. In conclusion, I believe that studying at
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institution
or
college
is very necessary,
that is
the best way to have a stable situation and become successful
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