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More and more people are using the internet to contact existing friends and even make new friends. Some people are of the opinion that this has strengthened relationships between existing friends, whilst others think the opposite is true. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #internet #contact #friends #relationships #whilst
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In the present era, numerous
individuals
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 are using the mobile phone to contacting with their knowns and
also
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 build new
relationships
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 with each other.
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 essay discusses both sides' arguments and opinions on
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 notion.
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 with, Nowadays, technology is growing
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 by
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 and
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 is very affecting individual's daily lifestyles and
relationships
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. who
people
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 did not touch with each other and they did not meet face to face for a very long time, It is a very easier way to connect with them,
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, they make new friends.
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, They build strong bonds and improve their relations easily.
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, I saw many
individuals
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 who did not touch with Connect since school or college time but for some ,reason they never meet again so they meet on social media through Facebook, and Instagram. I think
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 very useful way for
individuals
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 and the
internet
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 to make new
relationships
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 with unknown
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,
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, technology is very helpful for those
people
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 who are in long-distance love.
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, In past years
people
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 did not like the
internet
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 because there are many drawbacks than benefits, Some
individuals
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 think that the
internet
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 affected
individuals
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relationships
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, trust and loss of love.
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,
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 many
people
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 take advantage of the
Internet
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 they are used to save photos, emails, business purposes, saved large documents.
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, some
people
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 misused technology we saw a number of cases on TV, in newspapers related to divorce and crime, and cybercrime. In conclusion, the
Internet
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 is very beneficial for individual
relationships
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.
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, with time a plethora of
people
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 use the
internet
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day
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