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The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information.
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The given bar graph shows the
sales
amount
 of
Games
,
CDs
 and DVDs in the world from the
year
 2000 to 2003. As is observed from the graph, the
sales
 volume of
games
 software increased over the
year
 and
CDs
 were the most sold items in terms of
its
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sales
amount
 among the given items though VDVs slowly replaced
CDs
.
According to
 the data, in the
year
 2000, the
sales
amount
 of
CDs
 was 35
billion
dollars
 worldwide.
In
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this
year
 the
sales
amount
 for DVDs/ Video and
games
 were less than 20
billion
dollars
. The
sales
amount
 of these three items remained almost
same
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the same
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 in the next
year
 with some increment in the
sales
amount
 of VDV and
games
. Over the
year
 the
sales
amount
 of
CDs
 decreased and
finally
 reached
to
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just over 30
billion
dollars
 in 2003.
On the contrary
, the
sales
amount
 for DVD/ Video increased significantly and the
amount
 reached almost near the
sales
amount
 of the
CDs
.
Similarly
, the
sales
amount
 of
games
 increased and reached
to
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over 15
billion
dollars
 in 2003. In summary, DVDs gradually replaced the
CDs
 and
games
 software
sales
 increased for the given period of time.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, amount, games, cds, year, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 11 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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