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Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #countries #food #population #import
Nowadays, it is argued that countries should produce
food
 for their citizen.
However
, the
food
 products import less as possible. There are several advantages of producing
food
 to own.
Therefore
, I totally agree with
this
 notion and
also
 discuss
positive
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the positive
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 impact on the nation in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
 with, the biggest advantage is that
price
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 of
food
produce
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produced
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 would be less as compared
own
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food
 produces that transportation expenses, raw materials and other miscellaneous expenses were lower. As
result
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a result
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,
final
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the final
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 product
made
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with
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at
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lower
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a lower
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 price. Another
benfit
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benefit
 is that Gross Demand Product (GDP) would
increased
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increase
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 when the higher demand
of
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for
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 local items.
For example
, in the past 50 years, India had
import
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imported
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 wheat from the USA which sold
with
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at
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higher
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a higher
the higher
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 price.
On the contrary
, now India is the second largest democracy field
which
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produceing
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producing
produces
 80% of wheat.
Thus
,
economy
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the economy
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 surged
with
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by
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 18% in the
last
 year.
Furthermore
, when the nation
manufatured
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manufactured
manufacture
their
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its
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 own
food
 products that increased job
oppotunity
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opportunity
 in
food
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the food
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 industry.
For instance
, Amul is the largest milk production company that
they
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apply
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provide a lot of job opportunities for freshers and experienced workers. In
addtion
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addition
, the countries
manufaturing
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manufacturing
 their own products or items
that they
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apply
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research
about
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technology and
infrasturcture
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infrastructure
.
Consequently
, it will
helps
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 to grow
economy
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the economy
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 of the nation. In conclusion, import and export are the best way to exchange currency which will
also
helps
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help
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 to create
strong
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a strong
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 bond between both countries.
However
, the benefits of manufacturing
food
produce
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products
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 are more
that
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than
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impoting
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important
.
Hence
, I agree with
this
 notion.
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