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Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, it is argued that countries should produce
food
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 for their citizen.
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, the
food
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 products import less as possible. There are several advantages of producing
food
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 to own.
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, I totally agree with
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 notion and
also
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 discuss
positive
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the positive
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 impact on the nation in the ensuing paragraphs.
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 with, the biggest advantage is that
price
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the price
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 of
food
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produce
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produced
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 would be less as compared
own
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to own
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food
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 produces that transportation expenses, raw materials and other miscellaneous expenses were lower. As
result
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a result
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,
final
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the final
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 product
made
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is made
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with
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at
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lower
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a lower
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 price. Another
benfit
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benefit
 is that Gross Demand Product (GDP) would
increased
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increase
be increased
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 when the higher demand
of
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for
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 local items.
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, in the past 50 years, India had
import
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imported
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 wheat from the USA which sold
with
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at
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higher
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a higher
the higher
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 price.
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, now India is the second largest democracy field
which
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apply
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produceing
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producing
produces
 80% of wheat.
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,
economy
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the economy
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 surged
with
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by
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 18% in the
last
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 year.
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, when the nation
manufatured
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manufactured
manufacture
their
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its
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 own
food
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 products that increased job
oppotunity
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opportunity
 in
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food
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the food
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 industry.
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, Amul is the largest milk production company that
they
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apply
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provide a lot of job opportunities for freshers and experienced workers. In
addtion
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addition
, the countries
manufaturing
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manufacturing
 their own products or items
that they
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apply
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research
about
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apply
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technology and
infrasturcture
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infrastructure
.
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, it will
helps
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help
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 to grow
economy
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the economy
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 of the nation. In conclusion, import and export are the best way to exchange currency which will
also
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helps
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 to create
strong
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a strong
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 bond between both countries.
However
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, the benefits of manufacturing
food
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produce
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products
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 are more
that
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than
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impoting
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important
.
Hence
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, I agree with
this
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 notion.

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