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More and more people are using the internet to contact existing friends and even make new friends. Some people are of the opinion that this has strengthened relationships between existing friends, whilst others think the opposite is true. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, individuals use
the
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modern technology
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 available to
contact
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 their
friends
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 or even start new relations with others.
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 some consider
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 usage of the
internet
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 to
contact
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 people would promote
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friendships between each other, others might opine that nothing could replace face-to-face talking . I do support the first viewpoint, in
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Firstly
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, it has become a reality now to utilize the
Internet
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 applications
such
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 as Whatsapp, Facebook, and Twitter to chat or to talk with
friends
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, colleagues, and relatives.
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 one hand, it makes people able to
contact
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 each other anytime anywhere, and
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 of
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, they can preserve their connections and keep their relationships alive.
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,
friends
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 who live far away from each other or even who always have work commitments prevent them from visiting or seeing their close
friends
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, now they can make video calls through the
Internet
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therefore
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 they strengthen their connections as long as they are capable to be online.
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,
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 who seek new friendships,
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 trend brings numerous benefits for them
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, using dating applications are viral nowadays,
thus
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 many have a plethora of options to start new relations with new people from all over the world.
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, In Egypt, the recent analyzes of social relationships, say that the vast majority of citizens heavily rely on the
Internet
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 to
contact
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 their
friends
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.
On the other hand
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, those who believe that the opposite viewpoint is
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true
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 would argue that human relationships have been affected badly by
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 technology. If there was not
such
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 a technology, ties will remain in a strong condition because we see and talk to each other personally and regularly.
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, some talks should not be on video calls or phone calls
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 the significant importance of them. In conclusion,
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 it is now common to hear a lot of voices criticize
this
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 trend of using the
Internet
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 to
contact
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friends
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, I think the benefits I mentioned far outweigh the drawbacks.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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