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The bar chart compares 7 various factories that utilize ground and public water supply in a country. Data are expressed in millions of cubic meters.

The bar chart compares 7 various factories that utilize ground and public water supply in a country. Data are expressed in millions of cubic meters.
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The bar chart shows information about the numbers of Ground
Water
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 and Public Supply that are used for some industries in millions of cubic
meters
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. Generally, chemicals are the most used
water
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 factory, both from the dirt and public supply.
This
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 industry uses 430
million
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 cubic
meters
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 of
water
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 from the sand and 240
million
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 cubic
meters
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 from government sources.
In addition
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, Metal, Paper, and Food/Drinks become the three most used groundwater. These industries spend
water
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 above 100
million
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 for their production process
whereas
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 fuel, textiles, and machinery need the least numbers of
water
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 from the field, under 100
million
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.
On the other hand
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, food/drinks and machinery consume
water
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 from public supply above 100
million
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 for their activity.
This
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 is inversely proportional to other cooperatives,
such
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 as fuel, metal, paper, and textiles that need public source
water
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 under 100
million
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 cubic
meters
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.
To sum up
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, it can say that industry only utilizes one source for most of the
water
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that is
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 used. If one factory adopts most of the
water
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 from the sand, it will handle the least
water
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 from the public supply and vice versa.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, meters, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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