You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
In summary, the
bar
chart
provides information on the number
of overseas students
from four different countries
(Indonesia
, Hong
Kong
, Malaysia
, aIn summary, the bar
chart
provides information on the
Correct article usage
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Indonesia
also
saw a steady increase in student
admissions
from 1982 to 1994. The number
of Indonesian students
experienced a remarkable rise in 1994, reaching its peak in 1998 and making Indonesia
the country
with the most students
in Australia
. Hong
Kong
, on the other hand
, had no student
admissions
until 1997. However
, after that, the number
of students
swiftly rose and exceeded both Indonesia
and Malaysia
. By 1993, Hong
Kong
became the country
with the highest number
of students
in Australia
. Overall
, the bar
chart
highlights the changing trends in the number
of students
from different countries
selecting Australia
as their preferred destination for overseas education.In summary, the bar
chart
provides information on the number
of overseas students
from four different countries
(Indonesia
, Hong
Kong
, Malaysia
, and Singapore) who chose Australia
as their country
of residence between 1982 and 2000. The data shows that Malaysia
had the highest number
of students
in Australia
at the beginning of 1982, surpassing the other countries
. Although
Malaysian
student
numbers increased in 1982 and 1984, they remained steady from 1988 onwards. Notably, there was a significant surge in Malaysian
student
admissions
in 1994 and 1997. Indonesia
also
saw a steady increase in student
admissions
from 1982 to 1994. The number
of Indonesian students
experienced a remarkable rise in 1994, reaching its peak in 1998 and making Indonesia
the country
with the most students
in Australia
. Hong
Kong
, on the other hand
, had no student
admissions
until 1997. However
, after that, the number
of students
swiftly rose and exceeded both Indonesia
and Malaysia
. By 1993, Hong
Kong
became the country
with the highest number
of students
in Australia
. Overall
, the bar
chart
highlights the changing trends in the number
of students
from different countries
selecting Australia
as their preferred destination for overseas education. The data shows that Malaysia
had the highest number
of students
in Australia
at the beginning of 1982, surpassing the other countries
. Although
Malaysian
student
numbers increased in 1982 and 1984, they remained steady from 1988 onwards. Notably, there was a significant surge in Malaysian
student
admissions
in 1994 and 1997. Indonesia
also
saw a steady increase in student
admissions
from 1982 to 1994. The number
of Indonesian students
experienced a remarkable rise in 1994, reaching its peak in 1998 and making Indonesia
the country
with the most students
in Australia
. Hong
Kong
, on the other hand
, had no student
admissions
until 1997. However
, after that, the number
of students
swiftly rose and exceeded both Indonesia
and Malaysia
. By 1993, Hong
Kong
became the country
with the highest number
of students
in Australia
. Overall
, the bar
chart
highlights the changing trends in the number
of students
from different countries
selecting Australia
as their preferred destination for overseas education.Submitted by chien10955 on
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