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The diagram provides information about the growth trend of four modern technologies over the last six years.

The diagram provides information about the growth trend of four modern technologies over the last six years.
The diagram provides information about the
growth
Use synonyms
 trend of four modern technologies over the
last
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 six years. There are basically two types of
growth
Use synonyms
: upward and downward.
For example
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, in
Linking Words
this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 six years, CD players
haves
Correct your spelling
have
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 only upwards. In
Linking Words
this
Correct determiner usage
these
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 six years , internet access didn't sprout more than fifty
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
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,
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however
Add the comma(s)
,however
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 CD players gave the greatest
growth
Use synonyms
 of all , they upward more than eighty
percent
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per cent
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. The others
also
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 gave
growth
Use synonyms
, but not more than CD player and not less than internet access.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words growth with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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