There are more workers to work from home and more students to study from home. This is because the computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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It is commonly argued that more workers and students
work
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and study from
home
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because
computer
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technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper. Personally, I can neither completely agree nor disagree with
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statement for a variety of reasons. I partly agree that people
work
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and study from
home
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is positive. One of the main reasons can be that working and studying with individual computers at
home
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saves bulk
time
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and money.
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means that doing everything from
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does not take commuting
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as well as
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traffic fees
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as vehicle tickets, and fuel. Another reason can be that using their computers at
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make
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makes
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working and studying flexible
time
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because
computer
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technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper.
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, anyone who works from
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has
time
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to
work
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and take care of themselves.
On the other hand
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, I disagree with the viewpoint that doing
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and studying from
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is positive.
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, working and studying from
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does not have the opportunity to debate with their colleagues and friends.
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, those who
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from
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cannot meet face-to-face colleagues to discuss a problem.
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, using individual at
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is unmanaged by the supervisor of the company make them
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lose focus
while
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working.
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,
while
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using the
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at
home
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make
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they play more games, not
work
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. In conclusion,
although
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working and studying from
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with the
computer
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is more and more easily accessible and cheaper. I am convinced that working and studying from
home
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brings more positive and negative others.
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