The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram describes the steps and equipment used to make
bricks
for the building industry. Generally, the manufacturing process takes about 6 main steps before the
bricks
are packed in a truck to be delivered to a construction site.
The first step is
digging clay using the digger, after that, the clay is
then
transferred into a metal grid where it is rolled and mixed with water and sand to form the mould.
Next,
when the mould is formed it is placed into a wire cutter that cuts the preferred size of
bricks
.
Further
, the cut
bricks
are put into a drying oven and
stays
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in there between 24 to 48 hours after which they are taken into a kiln of low temperatures,
then
, onto the boiling kiln of 1300 degrees Celsius.
Finally
, the
bricks
spend 48 to 72 hours in the cooling chamber until they are cool enough to be packaged and transferred to the
builders
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industry.
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