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Student should spend time working before begining their University studies

#student #time #university #studies
There is an argument that
student
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students
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 be allowed to have a job to gain experience before they go to
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university. I absolutely agree with
this
 view and will
explan
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explain
 the reasons
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 my opinion in
this
esssay
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. We can clearly
seen
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 that the first benefit of working before
begining
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beginning
 university studies
of
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students
that
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 they can have a huge knowledge about
life
 and gain experience to boost
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life
 skill.
For instance
, the majority of
students
 always have part-time jobs after high school to gain useful
skill
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skills
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 for the future,
also
 is a sale assistant or a waiter in
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restaurant or a store. The second is
students
 can have more friends or more relationships and enhance
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communicative
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 skill.
For example
, you can make friends with your colleagues or consumers and
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relationships have
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 essential role in our
life
.
Besides
 that,
students
 can lead an independent
life
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without
depend
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 on their parents with the cost of living, which they
eran
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earn
 by themselves. With the instance that many
students
 leave home after they
graduaated
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graduated
graduate
 from high school to live alone. The final asset is the ability, knowledge and experience to solve problems and deal with many
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 of people in the
commnunity
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community
. The evidence of
this
 convincing idea is the opportunity of
the
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their job and their career in the future. Some
coporations
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corporations
 regularly choose the more experienced person than the other ones. These
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apparent
 in
this
 essay solidify my agreement.
To sum up
,
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 time working before beginning university
researchs
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research
 is
more
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better than just
study
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studying
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 at school day by day.
Hence
, I agree with
this
 valid argument on the grounds that it plays a vital role.
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