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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#government #money #railways #roads
Spending much
budgets
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 on railway systems is considered
as
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a better approach in comparison with
roads
.Some critics believe that
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 should pay considerable attention to these infrastructures.I totally disagree with allocating much more finance
on
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 railways and through
following
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 paragraphs I elaborate
some
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 aspects of
this
 public issue. There are numerous benefits
regarding
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to
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 the expansion of road systems.
Firstly
 , countless numbers of individuals are willing to commute
via
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using their personal cars daily which means
necessity
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 of
roads
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 access should be on
top
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 priority of the proposed government’s
budgets
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.
In addition
, in terms of
overall
 coverage of
roads
 and paths, it is inevitable that there are some mountainous regions
in particular
 areas of a country which
makes
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 it impossible to provide
proper
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 structure for railways.
For instance
, in Iran where I reside ,whole western parts of the country are
coverd
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covered
 by hills and in-depth
vallies
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valleys
 which makes it impossible to
develope
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develop
 railroads .So road paths would be a plausible approach in those zones and dedicating
govermental
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governmental
government
 finance there sounds more
resonable
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reasonable
.
Furthermore
,utilizing
roads
 allows citizens to stick to their time schedules and it provides incomparable convenience
yet
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 saving a great deal of time
due to
 using their private vehicles.
In other words
 ,the more car available
in
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 paths, the more demand
of
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 road expansion is witnessed.
However
, subway systems have offered a non-challenging yet low-fee mean of transition for passengers through preceding decades,
more
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 consideration
to
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roads
 and highways expansion infrastructures are needed. In conclusion ,
although
, advocates of railroad
developements
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developments
development
confess that more shares should be spent by authorities on
this
 section,
increasing
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 trend of
individuals
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tendancy
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tendency
,including
me
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, depicts that allocating
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the goverment’s
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goverment’s
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government’s
government
finance
on
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roads
 might be
more
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a more
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 accurate action.
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