Machines have replaced physical work in many industries. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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With the development of technology,
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gradually replace humans in more and more
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. In my view, the potential drawbacks of
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are negligible compared to their strengths.
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can reduce periodic work and generate more benefits in industries. If
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do the physical work in industries, companies can hire fewer workers which can cut budgets in manufacturing and dispose more money in designing and advertising processes. It will definitely make products more creative and appealing and bring more income.
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, in most situations, the products manufactured by
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are always have
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higher quality because of that
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are more precise than manually produced ones.
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can always reduce the probability of injury, particularly in some
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that are dangerous and required skills.
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are programmed so they are less easily to make mistakes than humans.
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, even though some accidents happen, the worst situation is that
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are destroyed.
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, compared with human injury or even deceased, the results are much less.
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the other hand, we should admit in some particular
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,
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sometimes cannot reach the demands.
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,in rocket manufacturing, there are some welding works
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workers rather than
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because some workers can complete an extremely high precision. In conclusion, I do believe that in most
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,
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can dominate the manufacturing process, especially for physical and periodical processes.
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, we should
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realize that sometimes humans can
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win over
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