Environmental damage is the problem of most countries. What factors damage the environment and who should take responsibility?

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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Environmental damage is the problem of most countries. What factors damage the environment and who should take responsibility?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Children find it difficult to concentrate on or pay attention to school. What are the reasons? How can we solve this problem?

Nowadays shopping has become a new favourite pastime for young people. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to encourage young people to develop other hobbies?

It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives

In recent years, there has been a rise in the use of performance-enhancing drugs in sports. What are the consequences of doping for athletes? What measures should be taken to combat this issue?

In many counteries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this a positive or negative development?