Environmental damage is the problem of most countries. What factors damage the environment and who should take responsibility?

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the modern world. More and more the nations have to face
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environmental
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the
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light on the reasons which cause
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lake
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and it can
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pollution of soil, water,
air
, disease burden.
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a wide range of vehicles.
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traffic jam and it
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increase
air
pollution.
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hours.
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To begin
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reduce
air
population and increase health.
in addition
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these young people about how to protect trees which helps
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become clean and fresh
air
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environmental
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damaged. There are
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