A reporter complained about a new TV program that you like. Write a letter to the newspaper editor. - Describe your point of view. - Say what you like about the show and why. - Ask the newspaper to take some action. You should write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam, Allow me to introduce myself, my name is Agung and I'm one of your newspaper customers. I'm writing
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letter to express my dissatisfaction
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your negative response about one of my
favourites
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TV
Program
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"Jurassic Park".
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about your comment that the programs didn't good for people under
18 year-old
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. Despite being seen under 18 years old,
this
show could help elementary until high school people to visualize
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the dinosaur. For me,
this
show had tons of insight about the dinosaur, which from its characteristics, foods, and habitats. People who liked an
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movie could obviously agree about how the programs went. I would like you to make a review not only
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side
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but could consider about the knowledge behind
this
shows. I would like you to ensure
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subjective review will not happen again in the future. Yours Sincerely, Agung
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