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The maps show the developments which took place in the coastal of town Laguna Beach between 1950, 1970 and 1990.

The maps show the developments which took place in the coastal of town Laguna Beach between 1950, 1970 and 1990.
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The masterplans of Laguna town
beach
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 represent the improvements done from 1950 every 20 years
upto
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up to
 1990. Over a period of 4 decades from 1950, the
beach
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 has been converted into more of a
resort type
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 destination by renovating the natural landscapes surrounding the
beach
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 into
man made
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 infrastructure.
Initially
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, in 1950 the
beach
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 only consisted of
beach
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 huts, a track, a woodland and sand dunes. Over the years
post
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past
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 2 decades, as
this
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 location gained more popularity, the muddy track has been converted
in
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 a road and the huts to
beach
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 villas.
In addition
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, the
wood land
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woodland
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 has been converted into sea facing caravan park which is just by the road.
However
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, the sand dunes have remained untouched. After 4 decades, in 1990, massive investments have been made in
this
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 location to attract more visitors. The desert has been scaped to landscape gardens
where as
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 the villas have been demolished and a new hotel has been constructed
along with
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 a pool.
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, the
camp site
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campsite
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 has been changed to a car park and the road has remained undisturbed.
Lastly
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, a surf school has been introduced to enjoy the waves.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beach with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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