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Many museums charge for admission while others are free.Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.Write at least 250 words.

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Museums
 are always an important part of exploring and explaining historical events. In most countries,
museums
 held a great deal of cultural significance. Some
museums
 require entry fees but others are free. I think charging fees for
museums
 will have more pros than cons.
Firstly
,
museums
 are required to maintain their collections and antiques and it will be very difficult for a country whose economy is not balanced to maintain
museums
 infrastructure.
Therefore
, it will
also
 be very difficult to pay the salaries of staff and guides. Every country wants to revive its history and
museums
 play an important part. So, they have to maintain their historical heritage.
For instance
, in Egypt, there is a museum
that is
 preserving the bodies of pharaohs and it will require a huge amount of money to persevere their bodies by using chemicals. Probing ahead, most tourists will not take an interest in
museums
 because it is human nature and it will be very difficult to maintain
museums
 without monetary. In the past, there are many
museums
 that are now closed because of their financial troubles or because of their poor conditions. Guides play an integral part in helping tourists and explaining to them about cultures and history a huge amount of money is required to make them pay.
Moreover
, people will be always attracted to a place which will be in good condition.
However
, a disadvantage of charging entry into the museum is that it lowers the number of tourists. The number of visits will reduce, especially if the fee is not affordable.
In addition
, many people like free services.
Therefore
, they would
instead
 go for a gallery that has free access than visit one that would cost them money
To conclude
, it is important to charge for
museums
 to maintain their cultural and historical properties. It will be very expensive and difficult for governments to maintain their infrastructures and to pay staff salaries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Admission fee
  • Revenue stream
  • Maintenance
  • Overcrowding
  • Commercialization
  • Cultural heritage
  • Diverse attendance
  • Community ownership
  • Access to culture
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit quality
  • Cultural mission
  • Reliance on funding
  • Government subsidies
  • Cultural accessibility
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