Culture is turning similar around the world. What are reasons? What are the positive and negative aspects?

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Today, the globalization of

culture

is a visible

phenomena

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. There are several reasons why

this

is happening, and social media and global digital connectivity are some common

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this

. There are some positive aspects,

such

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worldwide ciudadanity.

However

, we could identify a very negative aspect, the

lost

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of endemic

culture

Firstly

, let’s talk about the reasons why is

culture

turning

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similar in the

world

. Social media is creating a global narrative. An interconnected

estetic

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esthetic

aesthetic

dialogue. People in Latinoamérica and Europe now

use

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wear

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the same

cloths

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listen

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the same music, and watch the same shows. Global

interconectivity

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interconnectivity

, through

high speed

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internet

its

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also

one of the

principle

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reasons

this

cultural globalization is occurring.

Secondly

, let’s talk about the positive and negative aspects. A

world wide

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ciudadanity, the feeling of being all part of the same family, is one of the biggest positive aspects of

this

cultural transformation.

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the other hand, the

lost

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of endemic customs,

the

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and the

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little cultural singularities that

makes

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human being

such

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diverse individual, will be the negative aspect.

Overall

, the

world

is changing, it is increasingly connected and one of the products of

this

is the creation of a similar

culture

around the

world

. As we just

analize

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analysed

this

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changes

creates

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both positive (

world wide

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worldwide

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ciudadanity)

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and

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negative results (

lost

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of endemic

culture

This

said a recommendation that it’s pertinent, is that rules should evolve

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the needs of the citizens,

therefore

adapting to the new realities.

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Culture is turning similar around the world. What are reasons? What are the positive and negative aspects?

Fully explain your ideas

Do the benefits of artificial intelligence outweigh the potential risks?

In many countries, women and men are working full-time. It is, therefore, logical for women and men to share household tasks. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should to be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that children should obey rules and listen to their parents and teachers; Some others believe that less control will help children deal with their adult life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.