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The Charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie
chart
 provides information about the world’s
water
usage
 in several portions,
while
 the bar
chart
 shows as same contents but in selected countries. Both were taken in the year 2000 and the units are given in
percentage
.
Overall
, it is notable that the world’s most
water
usage
 field is agriculture,
however
, when it comes to the various countries, agriculture does not have the highest
percentage
 for every country. As can be seen from the table,
according to
 the pie
chart
, agriculture’s
water
usage
 has the highest
percentage
, 70%, followed by industry’s
usage
 which is 22%.
On the contrary
, domestic’s
water
usage
 has the lowest proportion at 8% which is three times lower than industry. Turning to the bar
chart
, India has the most agricultural
water
usage
 which is almost 100%, followed by China’s, nearly 70%,
whereas
 Canada’s agricultural
water
usage
 significantly figured out the lowest
percentage
 at 8%.
On the contrary
, India’s industrial
usage
 has the lowest at 3%, but Canada’s
usage
 of industry is the highest at 80%. Interestingly, New Zealand’s first
usage
 field is domestic, which is 46%,
whereas
 most of the other countries have the very lowest
percentage
 like 9, 5, and 12%.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, water, usage, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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