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The tables give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five countries.

The tables give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five countries.
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The two charts compare the amount of money spent on Fairtrade-labelled coffee and
bananas
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 in five European countries between 1999 and 2004.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 almost all sales numbers witnessed an increase over the period shown, apart from the figures for
bananas
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 sold in Belgium and Sweden. The UK saw by far the biggest consumer of the two products among those nations,
whereas
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 Sweden consumed the least of the two products. There were varying degrees of increase in the spending of Fairtrade-labelled coffee in those nations, in which Switzerland doubled the figure, rising from 3 to 6
million
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 euros,
while
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 the money spent in the UK witnessed a significant rise, with a more than thirteenfold increase from 1999, at €20
million
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.
Although
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 the expenditure on Fairtrade coffee in the rest of the countries
also
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 grew to a certain extent, none of them outnumbered €2
million
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. When it comes to the spending on Fairtrade-labelled
bananas
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, the number of outgoings in Britain rose to €47
million
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, which exceeded the total number of other countries combined. The money spent in Switzerland and Denmark increased above fivefold and sevenfold, at €5.5 and 4
million
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 respectively.
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, the expenditures on Fairtrade
bananas
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 were approximately halved in Demark and Belgium, declining from €1.8 to 1
million
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 and €2 to 0.9
million
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, respectively.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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