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Some countries have become much richer than others. Richer countries should now help poorer countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#countries
People
 might say They want humans to be equal which is called humanity. But in practice, It is rarely possible
due to
 different
countries
. Many
people
 in society believe that developed
countries
 should contribute their assistance to developing
countries
.
This
 essay agrees that
this
 notion should be taken place immediately.
Firstly
, Covid 19 pandemic has caused many problems in recent years. It impacted negatively in both wealthy
countries
 and unwealthy
countries
.
However
, richer
countries
 have more ability to cope with
this
 disease,
such
 as high technology, a lot of medical personnel, and numerous hospitals. Undoubtedly, they can invent antibiotics and vaccines and provide them to citizens in a short time.
On the contrary
, low-income nations may not have the ability to deal with
this
 epidemic like high-income
countries
 because of limited budgets and resources,
for example
 in Niger, Cameroon, and South Sudan. In my view, prospering nations have enough manufacturing capacity so they should distribute some parts to suffered
countries
. Basically, higher-income
countries
 usually have an efficient government that can manage
countries
 by using various policies to expand the quality of its
people
 in many aspects,
that is
 society, transportation, laws, and economy.
While
 some poorer
countries
 are taken care of by unskillful governments.
As a result
, they perish the vital
countries
' systems
although
 the country has adequate resources.
such
 as there is much gold and oil in Africa but
People
 still have a low-quality life I think richer
countries
 have knowledge that can share with poor
countries
. In conclusion, there are many things that civilized
countries
 can contribute to poor
countries
. I believe collaboration between developed and developing
countries
 is crucial. They should have a good relationship with each other which could lead to sustainable cooperation.
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