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Some students take one year off between finishing school and goin to university, in order to travel or to work. Do you think advantage outweigh disadvantages?

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There is denying
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 that the
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 of taking a year off after completing school and moving to University for
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 or for work
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 ubiquitous across the globe
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 importance.
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 of folks are in
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favour of
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 its number of merits.
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 some of the people highlight its demerits first. In my.
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advantages
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the advantages
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 and disadvantages of the same will be discussed. Initiating
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the benefits of the same, the first and foremost key benefit is that he can utilise to explore the world.
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 he can go to different countries and can learn about
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their
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 culture, heritage and language. By using the gap he can
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 explore his country for knowing his country deeply. Another benefit which can strike the minds of people can be that by doing
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 job or
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 job
he
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 can save money for
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further
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 education. To cite an example a student can work in a restaurant, supermarket or in a store.By earning money a student can support his family financially and physically. On
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 darker side some of the drawbacks which
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 it problematic are first a year gap may affect
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his studies.
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 he was not attending any classes or doing his homework etc.That's why he might not feel like
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 again
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 if he starts earning money education may
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seem
 unimportant. That's why it might
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 that a year gap can destroy
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 educational life In conclusion to the above statement, neither its pros
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 be neglected nor its cons. It is a mixed bag of positives and negatives. In my opinion, the statement should not be underestimated
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