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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education center in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education center in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map mirrors the number of men and women that engaged in diverse evening ways at the adult education courses in 2009.
While
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 the map represents, the pie chart indicates proportions of the appearance based on
age
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To begin
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 , the most popular event is the language by 60 people.
However
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, the sculpture is the least chosen among the attendees with approximately 15 humans. Returning to the pie chart, the range of
age
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 of the participants is the most with 42% between 50 & over 50 years old’s. Even though
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 institution is less attractive among the 20 years and under 20 years old’s. Second of all, it is clear as day, the number of female visitors is more than male. ,
Also
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 the amount of male tourists is the same in both drama and sculpture classes with 10 members.
In addition
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, the second attendant
age
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 group is between 40 and 49
age
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 periods with 26%. All in all, roughly 160 people attended
this
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 course most people who visited the evening education centre are often middle-aged.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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