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The two maps below show road access to the city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to the city hospital in 2007 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two maps illustrate the changes that take place in the
neighborhood
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neighbourhood
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 of the
City
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 Hospital between 2007 and 2010.
According to
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 the map of 2007, the
City
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 Hospital was surrounded by the Ring
Road
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. There was the Hospital
Road
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 going to the south from the Ring
Road
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 and joined the
City
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Road
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 which was from east to west.
In addition
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, along
the
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Hospital
Road
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was
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were
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 six bus stops,
while
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 the
Car
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park
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that
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apply
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was for both staff and
public
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the public
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located
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at
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on
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 the east side of it. In 2010, the
City
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 Hospital and
main
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the main
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 three roads remain basically the same, but two roundabouts were added at the two junctions of the main three roads. The six bus stops were removed
while
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 the new bus station
were
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builded
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built
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at
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on
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 the west side of
the
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apply
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Hospital
Road
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.
Furthermore
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, the old
car
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park
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 was changed to the staff
car
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park
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 and another Public
car
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park
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 was added
in
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on
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 the east side of the
City
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 Hospital.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, road, car, park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • improvements
  • facilitate
  • congestion
  • junctions
  • streamline
  • traffic flow
  • reduce congestion
  • public transport
  • bus station
  • efficiency
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • car park
  • designated
  • alleviate
  • issues
  • adequate space
  • enhancements
  • overall accessibility
  • traffic management
  • convenience
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