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THE CHART SHOWS THE NUMBER OF WORKING HOURS PER WEEK, IN INDUSTRIAL SECTOR, IN 4 EUROPEAN COUNTRIES IN 2002

THE CHART SHOWS THE NUMBER OF WORKING HOURS PER WEEK, IN INDUSTRIAL SECTOR, IN 4 EUROPEAN COUNTRIES IN 2002
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The bar charts depict a comprehensive
comparsion
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comparison
 of the percentage of workers with working
hours
 per
week
 in 4 different
european
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European
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country
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countries
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, in
industrial
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the industrial
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 field, in 2002.
Overall
, in 3 countries, the majority of individuals spent the highest time
of
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working at 36-40
hours
 per
week
whereas
 the other labourers spread widely in several range of working
hours
. Upon observation, In
denmak
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Denmark
, the dominant proportion of people who worked
at
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36-40
hours
 per
week
around
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 70%. Both
sweden
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Sweden
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 and the UK had the same pattern
to
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denmak
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Denmak
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 where
laborers
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labourers
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 consumed 36-40
hours
 per
week
 around 80% and 50%, respectively.
Nonetheless
, France was commanded by
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an employe
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employe
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employee
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 who used 31-35
hour
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hours
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 per
week
 with a range
approximately
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of approximately
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 a half. Shifting to
others
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others'
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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