In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Home

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and

Rent

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Nowadays, the rents in

this

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generation are more

expansive

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expensive than

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before in most countries.

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, owning a

home

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is much better

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then

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rent

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renting

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and

pay

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every single

month

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, and I totally agree that

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is a positive siltation. I would like to approve some reasons in the following graph.

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, owning a house is very important, the reason why is when

people

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owning

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home

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their

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will be no need to pay every

month

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for a

rent

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renting must have to pay every

month

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, before five years my father bought

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own house for only 430,000 riyals. After that, we

didn't pay nothing

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because

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the

home

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is our own.

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why

people

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must have or try to own a

home

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much faster

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could.

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, in

general

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the rents now are getting more expensive with

these development

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are happing in KSA

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Neom, the Line project, and the new tall buildings

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be build

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. Even so, the government will increase the payments to have more money. As well, it will began more difficult to pay for the

rent

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every

month

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, my married sister

are

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paying 5000 riyals for her

home

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rent

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, often

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is extravagance and self-pity.

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, there are more positives for owning

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home

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a home

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their

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are large benefits for

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Public

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must awareness what will happen in the future and avoid renting.

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, future prices are getting high even. On top of that,

people

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will struggle

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renting.

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12
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

8.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

251 words

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ownership
renting
importance
sense of security
stability
financial investment
asset
customize
decorate
belonging
community
potential
future generations
long-term
cost advantage
control
living space

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