These days more father's stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays it is seen that
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are staying at
home
and looking after their child,
while
,
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are ,
in stead
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instead
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of staying at
home
, working outside.
Women
are actually working outside for
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of reasons : to make a financial contribution
for
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he
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family and to
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adapt
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themselves
with
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the outside
world
.
This
essay will justify that it is obviously a good indicator considering all the perspectives.
Women
these days are seen
keen
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o be
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.
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no longer interested in relying on their husbands to
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their daily demands.
Moreover
, working outside to be
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will make them more bold l, confident and as
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who can contribute
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the national economy.
Furthermore
,
women
have long been staying at
home
to carry out
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responsibilities,
such
as
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cooking, looking after children and so on.
Thus
, they have been constantly deprived of making an adjustment
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the
world
away from their
home
.
Women
working
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outside is really a positive change for
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society.
Firstly
, they will grow a mindset to lead people in their working field ;
thus
, the issue of gender discrimination will be resolved.
Secondly
, men and
women
will share their thoughts
While
taking a decision which will surely introduce diversity in the
workin
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working
field.
For instance
, Samia Jannat , a leading Bangladeshi market development researcher, has brought significant effective changes and more
women
are feeling encouraged to flourish their potential in
this
job sector which was hardly possible even at best a decade back.
To conclude
, making sure the
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stability in a family and to cope with the external
world
are what lead them to work outside. Considering the reality of
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world
, I firmly believe that it is a good development being witnessed by our society.
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