These days more father's stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?
Nowadays it is seen that
dad's
are staying at Change the noun form
dads
dad
home
and looking after their child, while
, mom's
are , Change the noun form
moms
mom
in stead
of staying at Correct your spelling
instead
home
, working outside. Women
are actually working outside for couple
of reasons : to make a financial contribution Change the article
a couple
for
Change preposition
to
he
family and to Correct your spelling
the
adept
themselves Correct your spelling
adapt
with
the outside Change preposition
to
world
. This
essay will justify that it is obviously a good indicator considering all the perspectives.
Women
these days are seen keen
o be Change preposition
as keen
self dependent
. Add a hyphen
self-dependent
They
no longer interested in relying on their husbands to Add a verb
areThey
wereThey
fulfill
their daily demands. Change the spelling
fulfil
Moreover
, working outside to be self established
will make them more bold l, confident and as Add a hyphen
self-established
Add an article
an asset
asset
who can contribute Fix the agreement mistake
assets
in
the national economy. Change preposition
to
Furthermore
, women
have long been staying at home
to carry out family related
responsibilities, Add a hyphen
family-related
such
as ,
cooking, looking after children and so on. Remove the comma
apply
Thus
, they have been constantly deprived of making an adjustment with
the Change preposition
to
world
away from their home
.
Women
working at
outside is really a positive change for Change preposition
apply
the
society. Correct article usage
apply
Firstly
, they will grow a mindset to lead people in their working field ; thus
, the issue of gender discrimination will be resolved. Secondly
, men and women
will share their thoughts While
taking a decision which will surely introduce diversity in the workin
field. Correct your spelling
working
For instance
, Samia Jannat , a leading Bangladeshi market development researcher, has brought significant effective changes and more women
are feeling encouraged to flourish their potential in this
job sector which was hardly possible even at best a decade back.
To conclude
, making sure the economical
stability in a family and to cope with the external Replace the word
economic
world
are what lead them to work outside. Considering the reality of present
Add an article
the present
world
, I firmly believe that it is a good development being witnessed by our society.Submitted by jannathsamia576 on
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