Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of good. Other argue that customers should avoid buying good with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
people
believe that producers and shopping malls should be responsible for reducing the quantities of packaging done on their
products
while
others would argue that buyers should stop purchasing goods with excess packaging.
Although
,
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people
buying the product will not be able to notice relevant
information
when the packaging is cumbersome, I believe that the producers and the stores need to attract buyers by keeping the packaging simple. On
one
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hand, some
people
are of the opinion that important
information
about the goods will not be easily accessible with huge packaging and as
such
should be avoided
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Information
such
as expiry date,
nutritional
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and nutritional
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value are of interest to many
people
when buying consumable items and should be placed where
it
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can be seen easily.
Moreover
, searching for
these
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information
on several items during shopping can result in a waste of time.
For example
, in 2021, Tribune newspaper reported that 80% of
people
shopping in malls are keen
about
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the
information
on the packages of
products
purchased for personal use.
On the other hand
, another group of
people
believe that the sole responsibility of reducing the amount of packaging on
products
is for the manufacturers and supermarkets in order to get
people
to buy their
products
. Simple packaging will draw the attention of more
people
to the product and eventually result in
increase
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sales.
Likewise
, leading to rapid turnover of these items with huge income for the company.
For instance
, In 2018, a milk production factory made double
of
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the money made in the previous year by changing the packaging of the product. In conclusion,
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while
it is argued by some that consumers should
avod
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avoid
products
with excess packaging because relevant
information
will not be easily noticed.
This
essay is of the opinion that companies and supermarkets should make packaging simple to get more
people
to buy their
products
.
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