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The bar chart compares 7 various factories that utilize ground and public water supply in a country. Data are expressed in millions of cubic meters.

The bar chart compares 7 various factories that utilize ground and public water supply in a country. Data are expressed in millions of cubic meters.
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The graph presents the data of seven various works based on their usage of ground and public
water
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 supply in a country. Data are measured in millions of cubic meters.
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, chemical factories used ground and public
water
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 the most. Only machinery used the least
groundwater
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 supply,
whereas
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 in terms of public
water
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, fuel and textiles have the lowest usage. Chemical manufactory leads the utilization both
in ground
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 and public supply, with 430 and 240
million
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 respectively. Metal is in second place with 240
million
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 cubic meters
as
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of
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their
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apply
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groundwater
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 usage. In comparison, fuel, paper, and textiles' utilization of public
water
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 supply never exceeded 20
million
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. In terms of fuel, food or drink, and textiles, their
groundwater
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 consumption ranged from 70 to 110
million
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 cubic meters. It is
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 noteworthy that factories working on foods or beverages and machinery are the only factories that used more public
water
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 than
groundwater
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, groundwater, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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