The bar chart compares 7 various factories that utilize ground and public water supply in a country. Data are expressed in millions of cubic meters.

The bar chart compares 7 various factories that utilize ground and public water supply in a country. Data are expressed in millions of cubic meters.
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The graph presents the data of seven various works based on their usage of ground and public
water
supply in a country. Data are measured in millions of cubic meters.
Overall
, chemical factories used ground and public
water
the most. Only machinery used the least
groundwater
supply,
whereas
in terms of public
water
, fuel and textiles have the lowest usage. Chemical manufactory leads the utilization both
in ground
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and public supply, with 430 and 240
million
respectively. Metal is in second place with 240
million
cubic meters
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their
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groundwater
usage. In comparison, fuel, paper, and textiles' utilization of public
water
supply never exceeded 20
million
. In terms of fuel, food or drink, and textiles, their
groundwater
consumption ranged from 70 to 110
million
cubic meters. It is
also
noteworthy that factories working on foods or beverages and machinery are the only factories that used more public
water
than
groundwater
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, groundwater, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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