An overseas friend wants to visit your country on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Recommend the best time of year to visit and why Describe the types of accommodation your friend could choose Say what you would like to show your friend in your country

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Dear Jun, How are you? I hope you're doing well. I am excited to hear that you're going to visit my country on the next holiday.

However

, I have several things to tell you before you come. Let me explain

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the situation.

Firstly

, the winter season in Santonio would

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best time for you to visit because there would be numerous activities and festivals in my country.

Furthermore

, I know that you love playing with snow right?

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there will be a competition for the snowballs war. As for the accommodation, I have a spare room in my apartment and maybe you can stay at my place

instead

of spending your budget living in a hotel.

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, the room is spacious with

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conditioner and

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balcony. I would like you to visit a famous pastry shop in my country, it's renowned for serving the best croissants.

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, I know you're a shopaholic and currently, there is a new shopping mall

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items, should we check it out ? I am looking forward to your reply soon. Warm regards, Jun

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