Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some individuals recommend that a nation should try to produce all the
food
for its inhabitants and import as little
food
as possible. I totally agree with
this
statement because
produce
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food
locally can bring many benefits
for
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to
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country
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the country
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, enhance
national
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the national
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economy
,
provdie
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provide
reliable
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a reliable
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source of
food
, and local
food
inexpensive.
To begin
with, there are several reasons why I believe
country
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the country
a country
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should try to produce all the
food
for its population and import as little
food
as possible.
Firtsly
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Firstly
,
produce
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food
locally can
boosts
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boost
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local
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the local
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economy
.
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The
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is because
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producing
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produce
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producing
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food
locally
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supports
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support
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supports
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local companies
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that
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who
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that
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produce
food
such
as, vegetables, fruits, and grains, which
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means
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mean
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means
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local companies will earn more money from
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selling
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sell
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selling
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their goods.
Therefore
, governments earn more taxes via local companies, which
this
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apply
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contribute
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contributes
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to
local
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the local
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economy
.
Furthermore
,
produce
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producing
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food
locally can create employment opportunities and income for local people.
For example
,
thousand
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thousands
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of people will work in local
food
factores
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factories
factors
as
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apply
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, engineers, and drivers for
truck
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trucks
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, which
this
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apply
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can contribute to
mtigiate
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a higher
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rate of poverty among local residents.
Secondly
,
produce
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producing
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all
food
locally can
provdie
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provide
food
security for
country
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the country
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.
This
is because
country
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the country
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will become more independent on
themselve
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themselves
to produce their own
food
.
For example
, when the
U.S.A
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U.S.A.
imposed punishments on China
these
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this puhishment
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puhishment
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punishment
punishments
was
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had
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have low impact on
food
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the food
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supply
on
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of
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China because China
produce
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produced
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their own
food
by
themselve
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itself
.
Finanly
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Finally
,
produce
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producing
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all
food
locally can make
food
accessible for all population in
country
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the country
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.
This
is because local
food
often
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is often
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cheaper than imported
food
, which
mean
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means
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more people can purchase local
food
.
To sum up
, I completely think
country
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the country
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should try to produce all the
food
for its population and import as little
food
as possible because
produce
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producing
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food
locally
bring
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brings
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many merits for
country
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the country
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including
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apply
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,
support
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including supporting
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local
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the local
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economy
,
provide
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providing
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food
security, and
increase
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increasing
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availability
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the availability
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of
food
for local residents .
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