Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some individuals recommend that a nation should try to produce all the
food
for its inhabitants and import as little food
as possible. I totally agree with this
statement because produce
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producing
food
locally can bring many benefits for
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to
country
, enhance Add an article
the country
national
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the national
economy
, provdie
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provide
reliable
source of Correct article usage
a reliable
food
, and local food
inexpensive.
To begin
with, there are several reasons why I believe country
should try to produce all the Add an article
the country
a country
food
for its population and import as little food
as possible. Firtsly
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Firstly
produce
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producing
food
locally can boosts
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boost
local
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the local
economy
. Correct article usage
This
The
is because Correct your spelling
This
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producing
produce
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producing
food
locally Correct subject-verb agreement
supports
support
local companies Correct subject-verb agreement
supports
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that
who
produce Correct pronoun usage
that
food
such
as, vegetables, fruits, and grains, which Correct subject-verb agreement
means
mean
local companies will earn more money from Correct subject-verb agreement
means
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selling
sell
their goods. Wrong verb form
selling
Therefore
, governments earn more taxes via local companies, which this
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apply
contribute
to Correct subject-verb agreement
contributes
local
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the local
economy
. Furthermore
, produce
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producing
food
locally can create employment opportunities and income for local people. For example
, thousand
of people will work in local Correct your spelling
thousands
food
factores
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factories
factors
as
, engineers, and drivers for Change preposition
apply
truck
, which Fix the agreement mistake
trucks
this
can contribute to Correct pronoun usage
apply
mtigiate
rate of poverty among local residents.
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a higher
Secondly
, produce
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producing
food
locally can provdie
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provide
food
security for country
. Add an article
the country
This
is because country
will become more independent on Add an article
the country
themselve
to produce their own Correct your spelling
themselves
food
. For example
, when the U.S.A
imposed punishments on China Correct your spelling
U.S.A.
these
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this puhishment
puhishment
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punishment
punishments
was
have low impact on Verb problem
had
food
supply Correct article usage
the food
on
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of
produce
their own Wrong verb form
produced
food
by themselve
. Correct your spelling
itself
Finanly
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Finally
produce
all Wrong verb form
producing
food
locally can make food
accessible for all population in country
. Add an article
the country
This
is because local food
often
cheaper than imported Add a missing verb
is often
food
, which mean
more people can purchase local Correct subject-verb agreement
means
food
.
To sum up
, I completely think country
should try to produce all the Add an article
the country
food
for its population and import as little food
as possible because produce
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producing
food
locally bring
many merits for Correct subject-verb agreement
brings
country
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the country
including
, Verb problem
apply
support
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including supporting
local
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the local
economy
, provide
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providing
food
security, and increase
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increasing
availability
of Add an article
the availability
food
for local residents .Submitted by faiz3177 on
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