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In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In some nations, companies have been allowing people to perform their jobs from their
home
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. That,
however
, is not a consensus, as in other places people are still expected to attend the
office
 to
work
. It is my opinion that both alternatives have their advantages
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 and that
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 hybrid model is probably the ideal one. Since the COVID-19 pandemic, several companies have been
alowing
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allowing
 their employees to
work
 from
home
. That saves time, since people do not need to commute to the
office
, and is
also
 much more
confortable
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comfortable
 for many workers
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 since they are closer to their families. When working from
home
,
for example
, mothers and fathers may be able to look over their children during the
thay
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day
,
while
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 they would have to be out in the city centre. There are,
however
, different views on
this
 topic.
Firstly
, bosses and CEOs have said that adopting a full
home
office
 model would affect the
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 ability in their squads.
Secondly
, even workers have expressed that the change had caused them problems. Some do not have
confortable
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comfortable
 places to
work
 from
home
,
while
 others just feel
lonley
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lonely
 without the
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daily
work
 interactions. To
sumarise
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summarise
summarize
,
thus
, it is my opinion that both views have their merits. For that reason, I believe that a solution that combines some days working from
home
 with some days at the
office
 would be the best way to move
foward
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forward
.
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