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The chart below shows how frequently people in the usa ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013

The chart below shows how frequently people in the usa ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013
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The illustration gives information about the frequency of eating fast
food
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 in US restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
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,the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 in daily life had low value to those who ate once or twice a month. It is quite evident from the bar chart that the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who ate daily basis fast
food
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 at restaurants had a minimum value in 2013 but in 2006 the
percentage
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 of
people
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 that ate fast
food
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 several times a week had increased.
In contrast
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, the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 once a week apply increased gradually in 2013.
Furthermore
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,the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 once or twice a month apply increased in 2013. But the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 a few times a year apply decreased in 2014. , the
percentage
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 of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 never
had
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increased in 2003
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, percentage, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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