Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned while others think people should be free to choose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Dangerous
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has taken many live so as doing nothing .Some
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think that it is their choice to choose if they want to
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dangerous
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or not .other think it should be banned .
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essay will examine both sides of the discussion.
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will give my opinion on it. On the one
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people
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think that dangerous
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should be banned.Many
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think that when
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say
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they think of broken bones or muscle these all are major
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but not fatal
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that
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the case all the time
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do die from dangerous
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sport
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or suffer a fatal injury that causes them to be unable to walk or speak .
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many rock climbers especially free rock
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that
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do not use ropes to help them climb those guys end up dead when their hands slip or
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do to other causes but they
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die from the fall .What actually make dangerous
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scary is what
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do to those
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people
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brains . For instance, take deep diving or climbing whether
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are at the top of the mountains or at the bottom of the ocean they get what is called an adrenaline rush that
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them
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some what
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free or light-headed.
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some
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believe that dangerous
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should be free to choose.
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is because if
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banned
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what are those
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going to do yes some of them might stop
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practiceing
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practising
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which would be good but some
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might not .
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may be because for them dangerous
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is the only
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for them to release that pent-up energy inside of them and that bad if
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cant
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it
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because now they
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their only
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of getting that pent-up energy out of them . Now they have to find another
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to get that pent-up energy out the new
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might be releasing it in a bad
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or it might
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be in a good
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some dangerous
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.Namely free diving can be useful sometimes let's say somebody drowned in deep water who would come and save them in time before the rescue team does that rights the free diver that does a dangerous
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In conclusion
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it is clear to see that dangerous
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has two sides.Should it be banned or should it be free for
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to choose? In my opinion, I think it should not be banned at all.
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