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Some people have the opinion that big shopping malls are expensive places as they offer high costs for the products which can be bought at much cheaper prices from local shops. On the other hand, some people think that such malls are absolutely the best places to visit for shopping. Discuss both the opinions and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your ans

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Shopping
malls
 are getting increasingly popular these days since most of them are multifunctional and can satisfy
people
's various needs. Some
people
 think shopping
malls
 are
an
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ideal places to go
while
 others believe they are too costly to visit. Both views will be discussed and a conclusion will be reached
at the end
 of the discussion. On one hand, shopping
malls
 are considered to be an entertaining
center
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centre
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 which can satisfy
people
's all kinds of needs.
For example
, we can select what we want from our
favorite
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favourite
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 stores, stop to have a cup of coffee in a coffee shop and
then
 go to watch a movie without leaving the mall.
Therefore
, the different functions of shopping
centers
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centres
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can provide its visitors efficient and pleasant shopping experience and save them the trouble of moving from place to place.
On the other hand
, just like what the other group of
people
 suggest, it is more expensive to make the same purchase in a shopping mall compared with online or from
the
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local shops. Consumers need to pay for the extra service they enjoy for the shopping experience.
For instance
, the rent, space and professional shopping
assisants
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assistants
 are actually all parts of the cost that the consumers are expected to cover.
Therefore
, as far as I am concerned, shopping
malls
 are nice choices if
people
 seek a complete set of services and they can spend a whole day there with their friends or family
memebers
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members
. But if you are
in
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 a tight
buget
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budget
 and are in a rush to get the item you need, it is more advisable to shop online or in a local store.
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