The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.
The provided line graph illustrates how many individuals participated in a group of sports
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in at
at
specific district over two decades.
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a
Over all
. It is evident that people had overwhelming interests in Rugby at the beginning and Correct your spelling
Overall
on the contrary
with Tennis at the end
.
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first glance, Correct article usage
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while
Rugby constituted the highest point in1985
and recorded nearly 250 individuals, Correct your spelling
in 1985
this
game depicted a dramatic decline to touch the lowest point at the end
of the period to meet with Bedminton
at 50 athletes. Correct your spelling
Badminton
However
, Tennis provided the second popular
game Correct quantifier usage
most popular
at
1985 after Rugby playing, it rocketed to hit Change preposition
in
the
peak Change the word
its
at
2005 when boasted Change preposition
in
at
well over 200 Change preposition
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participatory
.
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participants
Furthermore
, over the periods, Basketball and Bedminton
registered a plateau trend. Correct your spelling
badminton
While
they remained static, the number of Baskeball
surpassed Correct your spelling
basketballs
the
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Bedminton
by roughly a quarter as Basketball given nearly under 100 but Bedminton
had exactly 50 one
.Correct pronoun usage
apply
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