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The amount of drinkable water for people is decreasing. Why is this? What can be done?

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The level of Water is declining for the purpose of drinking among
people
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.
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 the decrease in drinkable water’s amount has some specific reasons, the implementation of certain measures can be effective in solving
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 problem. To initiate the reasons that are responsible for the decrease in the extent of drinkable drinks. The first and foremost cause is domestic and industrial
waste
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. To explain, when the misuse is released by the growing number of industries and
people
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 at home, it is dumped into the canals, rivers, and seas that are the major source for providing rain to
people
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 rather than being thrown somewhere else.
As a result
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, the
waste
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 materials mix with the fresh water and
makes
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 it polluted
that
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leads
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leading
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 to the fall
of
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in
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 the amount of freshwater among
people
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.
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, the popular seas
such
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 as Ganga, Yamuna, and Saraswati
as well as
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Brahmaputra
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the Brahmaputra
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river
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rivers
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 were considered to be very popular in the past because of the major source of freshwater, but nowadays, all these have been polluted by throwing industrial and household leftovers. Despite the causes, there is a number of solutions for solving the declining problem of drinkable drink. The primary one is to take strict actions by the government. To elaborate,
while
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 throwing litter, whether it is industrial or domestic, the high authority must
fine
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find
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the
people
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, whereby the individuals may be committed to throwing the
waste
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 somewhere else or
recycle
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recycling
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 it
instead
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 of the major sources of freshwater rain
such
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 as rivers, canals , and seas.
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,
the
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western
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 countries, which are very strict in terms of protecting natural resources, especially rain, have a large amount of natural drinkable water without any purifiers. In conclusion, though
the
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industrial and household
waste
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 are the two major reasons for the fall in the supply of drinkable
drink
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drinks
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, the involvement of
government
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the government
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 might be effective by taking strict actions to solve
this
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 issue.
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