The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps compare the changes
of
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the
area
in
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Stokeford in 1930 with that of 2010. Generally speaking, the residence
area
expanded and farmland
was
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disappeared. The gardens were
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to
be
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the retirement home and
houses
. As is given illustration, in 1930 the residence
area
was below the bridge, combined with shops, the post office and the primary school. There was a large
area
for farming in the
north eastern
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of the map and the
south western
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southwestern
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. 80 years after, the villagers built their
houses
along the road to the south
,
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and
also
built more
road
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to expand the house
area
. The
agriculture
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area
was disappeared and some of that
area
altered to be
houses
. The shops in the village were changed to
houses
. The post office and primary school were still the same place,
moreover
, the school was bigger. What is more, in 1930, there
was
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the
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gigantic gardens
in
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the east side of the village. Inside its
area
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there were
the
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large
houses
. In 2010,
houses
and
the
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retirement home were built
instead
of
the
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gardens.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area, houses with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • maps
  • Stokeford
  • 1930
  • 2010
  • main features
  • overview
  • changes
  • similarities
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