Libraries are a waste of money, therefore, computers should be used to replace them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people are of the opinion that
libraries
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funding should be cut and the money invested in making computers available to the public
instead
. I mostly agree with
this
line of thought and the following paragraphs shall explain why
this
is the case.
Firstly
, libraries should not receive any more funding because they contain
such
a limited and often outdated amount of information. As soon as a book is published it goes out of date and cannot be updated without an entirely new copy being printed which is both costly and time-consuming.
On the other hand
, a computer connected to the internet overcomes both of these limitations with ease,
for example
, any
web-site
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, pdf, or online journal can be continuously updated by the authors and there is no time wasted in printing
of
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the book.
On the other hand
, though, libraries do still offer a quiet place for members of the public to go and read. In today’s
fastpaced
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society
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there are few places to be found where people can simply go and relax without fear of being hassled by
salesman
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or traffic which may have damaging consequences for the public.
For instance
, a report in the ‘Journal of Good
Health’
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recently reported that spending as little as 5 minutes per day
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quietly on your own can reduce the risk of a heart attack or stroke by 50%, so, losing the quiet space of a library could harm a nation’s
overall
health.
To sum up
, the public need for
up to date
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information and
also
for restful places for people to relax needs to be considered carefully. Governments need to decide what their priority is and act
accordingly
.
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