The presented pie chart illustrates the household spending of Japanese and Malaysian in 2010.

The presented pie chart illustrates the household spending of Japanese and Malaysian in 2010.
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represents
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the amount of household
spendings
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spending
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in two different countries by 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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in Japan people spend most on
housings
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housing
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,
while
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for
Malaysian
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the Malaysian
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population other goods and services are in priority,
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moreover
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it is interesting to note that for both countries food is the
last
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thing on what they would spend money
.
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As can be seen in the diagram Japanese society spend most on
housings
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housing
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(29%), health care (24%) and
on
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other goods and services (21%). Meanwhile, food and transport together take
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one quarter
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of the chart.
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