a friend of yours is thinking of going on camping holiday for the first time this summer, he asked for your advice. write a letter to your friend, in your letter explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer
Dear Ali,
I hope
this
letter finds you well that a camping holiday is the best choice of trip these days, I know you have hectic
lifestyle Correct article usage
a hectic
thus
you need calmness on holidays besides
you live in Correct article usage
a pulloted
pulloted
city so you need fresh air. if you go Correct your spelling
polluted
to
vacation on out of the city, you Change preposition
apply
would
feel fresh and you can enjoy Wrong verb form
will
Correct article usage
an unintrupted
unintrupted
view Correct your spelling
uninterrupted
on the other hand
camping is cost-effective for you.
there are some drawbacks that are witnessed in camping holidays , you may suffer from lake
of Add an article
the lake
a lake
toilet
Fix the agreement mistake
toilets
thus
you should have a huge pack of water by yourself. Although
in our city the weather is hot, in Correct article usage
the mountain
mountain
or jungle the weather is mild so do not think about Fix the agreement mistake
mountains
warm
night.
as you know I fancy natural locations if you want I can come with you , I have bought an offroad car recentlyCorrect article usage
a warm
in fact
we can enjoy Add the comma(s)
, in fact,
more
and more.
I do recommend you to go to Correct pronoun usage
ourselves more
Add an article
the mountain
a mountain
mountain
in summer and forget anything about dessert because Fix the agreement mistake
mountains
human
can't stand in dessert for 24 hours in Fix the agreement mistake
humans
this
season.
best wishes
Saed TavazoieSubmitted by tavazoiesaed on
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Coherence and Cohesion
Improve coherence and logical structure in the letter. Connect ideas in a more organized manner.
Coherence and Cohesion
Expand the greeting and closing sections to include more appropriate content for a letter. Focus on using appropriate conventions for letter writing.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on developing a single idea per paragraph to improve clarity and coherence in the letter.
Task Achievement
Ensure that the response fully addresses all aspects of the task prompt, including discussing advantages and disadvantages of a camping holiday and expressing a preference for going camping with the friend.
Task Achievement
Try to use a more suitable writing tone for a formal letter, and focus on using appropriate language and expressions for the context of the letter.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite