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in many countries today, crime novel and TV crime dramas are becomig more and more popular. why do you think these books and tv shows are popular? what is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

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these days, The number of crime
movies
 or crime stories is dramatically increasing.
This
 essay will analyze the major causes of why people tend to read
these kind
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 of books or watch these categories of serials
as well as
 my view about crime programs. People prefer to watch action
movies
.
First,
case serials or flick have
catched
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caught
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 high score
in
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 IMDB because in these
movies
, a viewer can see guns or unusual scenes
besides
 they have
a
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 amazing story
thus
 young population pay money to buy a ticket for
this
 category from the cinema and directors find out they can be wealthy more easily through
this
 products. in
fact
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 people are reluctant to watch scary
movies
instead
 they want to see something more real. Second families want to be aware of how a teenager or adult man can be a murderer or thief. in these novels, a reader can feel the steps of being a killer, they show poverty or lack of attention, how will make a stranger, police advise
community
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 to read documents related to illegal life
then
 parents can grow better children in the future. In my idea thief fiction are so fantastic,
To begin
with
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 the rate of
pursnatching
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our snatching
 is rising every day so we should know how to defend our wallet from stealer.
Moreover
, I learn many things from real stories of killers, I understand most of them were not
a
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bad
guy
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guys
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, They just lost their control when they became angry. I decided to talk with a psychologist once a month to control myself in stressful situations. By way of conclusion ,It appears to me that gangster
movies
 are fantastic and they have more fans than other serials and teach us many things.
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